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Endless wait

A bloody tear streams down her face

crying out in pain, lonely and unwanted 

she looks out upon the rain

wondering if they will ever care

feeling all alone.

 

The day suits her mood,

dark, gloomy and oh so dreary

death awaits, life abates, 

trouble and tears, 

she waits for him

and he never comes.

 

 Troubled fears of a dark nature

terrorize her mind

no lightness, no sun

just like this day has done

alone, useless, no more,

and she sits staring out the window.

 

Isolated from the entire world

blood draining from her eyes

he made her what she is

no longer does she cry.

 

Thirsting for the love she craves

wasting away going towards her grave

gone from this world he is

taking her life with him.

 

Alone in this world of woe 

no longer does she care

away from everyone she use to care about

trapped behind the glass

of this gilded cage.

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1] ever felt left out? Isolated? Like youve no one? And its SUCH a cliche thing that no one cares? Any of those things, tell me bout it


Abariel Raven (user name)

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  • Troubled fears of a dark nature

    terrorize her mind

    no lightness, no sun

    just like this day has done

    alone, useless, no more,

    and she sits staring out the window.


    Dunno why it separated like that. I really like this poem. it bled the lonliness thank you for entering and good luck in te contest


  • penman gold member
    April 25
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    Excellent

    A terrific write. and so deserving of the gold. Congratulations


  • YOtta
    April 21

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    Beneath her toes lies the puddle of blood
    and beyond that,
    her childlike reflection
    was it ever worth the years and tears shed?

    Darkness fears the light
    that her innocence inflame
    she finds the strength within her
    and she now knows things won’t ever be the same

    Her tears infuriate
    shattering hollowed halls
    her cry reverberates
    fuming endless awe’s

    A guardian angel descends
    and smile’s to her face
    she smiles back
    and for once

    She feels a heavenly refuge
    her immortal embrace.
    .......................................

    Love it when when other poems inspire me, i just can't help myself...
    Your words are heartwrenching, aching and sad. But… in every dark pit there’s a light somewhere… and I know you have it somewhere within you to find it... a spark that’ll light up your path and guide you.

    Heartfelt and genuine, I could connect and relate with you.
    Keep on writing, and inspiring =)


  • lyricist
    April 21

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    this is good. and i know whats its like to feel isolated. especially when you grow up and have no friends but the opposite sex. and all they want is one thing. thirsting for love and wasting away to ones grave. very understanding

  • yay great poem with meaning, emotion and many many techniques, good poem, good poet
    And thanks for your AN


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    April 18

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    Let not the darkness of solitude bury you in its existance,
    let not the cold of damp condensationed windows cloud your views,
    let not your heart be burdoned by lonely hours of a contactless world,
    but stand and walk to the door, open your hands to those who call,
    one way or the other, light will be let in,
    and you will be lifted from the chaos of a closed mind.

    ok, you inspired me, and this is what came of it.
    Your words carry an air of need, and tho they are an entry, the feel of them is so strong, I thought I'd return an option. Great write from you as always and should place well too.
    Been too long since I dropped by, but glad I did now.

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