in the place smaller than light
where thoughts become life
they reside
when the paragon is breached
they extend their reach
so that pain can teach
do you heed the augural call
or fall into the pall?
does the ache hold you enthralled
or do you mend after the gall?
do you rise after your fall?
do you even care at all?
the guardians of your night
are the demons you hold tight
when you lie
the noesis you suppress
while trying to oppress
the cause of your distress
will make you die
the temple doors
and the torch bearers
are blooming born
within the starer
we are here
(the numina are watching you)
and we are you
(the numina are warning you)
the blackened mirror
(the numina are saving you)
reflecting truth
(the numina are killing you)
in the place smaller than light
where thoughts become life
they reside
Author notes
When an inner situation is not made conscious, it happens outside as fate.
One does not become enlightened by imagining figures of light, but by making the darkness conscious.
C.G. Jung
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- darkside by emoempess.
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most know I am not a huge fan of rhyme, but you do a great job with it here, I love some of your unique vocab choices and flow.....are these meant to be lyrics? I could see this being turned into a song
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so very true.........magnetic energy of what we
exude...........out into this world.........
you wrote this with flawless flow
smoothly done...
wise truths.
ears/Seattle
I am becoming a HUGE Fan of your Poetry!
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why, thank you very much!
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hmm jung, my favorite read on a dark night. I liked it, i will say the third stanza sticks out like a sore thumb, too many all words, hindered the flow of the rest of the piece for me. I liked the circular motion of this, the beginning and the end, what starts in darkness so ends
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thank you for your critique, always appreciated. i would maybe do something with that third stanza, but i have written this with a melody that obviously doesnt always translate well when being read. that part goes like da da da da da da da-ah.
haha. when i record it i'll show you someday.
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Dark but seems valid.
I have not read any Jung, accept he fell out with Freud, not difficult apparently lol.
L23/30, helped open it up for me. love the use of rhyme at L15/17 ,
But it is all very well written.The seventh stanza is a pure joy, the implied threats from the spirit that knows all, fabulous.
Liked your work a lot. thank you for sharing it.
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thank you! that was the part i worked on most, how to fit it all together there, i am glad you appreciated it
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Intrigue
Surely it is of a mind wandering lost in the cathedrals of humanity, looking for what is holy yet the darkness is all you see.
"in the place smaller than light
where thoughts become life
they reside"
Try as hard as you may, you wonder where the very road life lays down for you really leads.
Let not moments of lucidity slip you by for few they are in this not so new sacrifice we call life.
I like it, I like it so!
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the inspiration for this piece came from a lecture i heard.. the speaker discussed "dark guardians." the hurt and the pain and shame so many of us too often run from or medicate instead of listening to and respecting are these very guardians, warning us not to sin against our own spirit.
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Fate?
When an inner situation is not made conscious, does it happen as fate or a self-fulfilling prophecy? Something to think about. A dark but interesting read and well written!
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good question. i believe the two are interchangeable really in this context. i believe that's what jung was speaking of in his own way.
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The most striking aspect of this poem is the rhyme... it keeps the poem moving and feels like a song. Are these lyrics? At any rate, the title caught my attention and I'm glad I clicked on your entry. I enjoyed reading.
Peace - PB -
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thanks a lot. and yes you picked up on the lyrical qualities i put into this. i wrote this with a melody in my head. i grew up listening to bands like bad religion that really inspired me to use language and rhyme and melody to think and feel in ways that go deeper than the mainstream, into the soul and the intellect. also to pass the torch to others and inspre them as well.
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fantastically dark, love the images you put in my head, especialy looking in the mirror bit at the end, very powerful. i love it x
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thank you
yeah mirrors are very useful symbols, they reflect all.
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I read this....
but it seems dark to me, and it is not a subject I am familiar with so I really cannot make a valid comment.
I did read it three times, because the first time I believed you were forcing rhyme. But I was wrong.
Your imagry is valid I think, but like I say, this poem takes e into territory unfamiliar.
This line:
"they extend there reach"
I believe THERE should be THEIR in keeping with the THEY of the first stanza.
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thank you. i appreciate that.
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wonderful imagery and awesome poem i love how you began it with something that is almost unimaginable it really draws the reader attention good job
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This was an awesome poem!!!!
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