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Our day in the sun

The sun rises on us
Your beauty radiates from you and becomes all I can see
You helped me see light when before it had been to dark to see
I've been searching for things I never needed
The things I've found I need are quite simple like my growing affection
Your presence spreads warmth like the suns over a cold surface
I wish you could stay but the night always comes and ruins everything we once had in the sun.

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I wrote this poem for class. We had to have a symbol. which is the sun/ new beginnings.

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