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A Dancer's Prayer

Lord bless me with confidence
So like the stars at night
I may shine bright

Please grant me patience Lord
Because all great things
Come with time

Please gift to me endurance
So I my push myself harder
So that I may become stronger

And bless me with the power of

 Dedication and determination forever

So that I may give up never


Grant me the courage
To attempt the impossible

And the heart
To make it possible

Lord grant me with grace
So like an dove
I may soar the clouds above

Lord help me quench
My thirst
for success

And satisfy
My hunger
for greatness

So that Lord
I may thank you

And praise your name
Through Dancing 



  Amen.

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  • Tuesdays-child
    September 3

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    Lovely prayer! You have added very nice personal touches to it, and it flows well.

    Some things you might want to consider:

    In stanza 7 (line 2) "an" really should be "a."

    In stanza 1, technically, the word "bright" is not grammatically correct. It's meant to be an adverb, so it should be "Brightly." However, for rhyming purposes, I think you could get away with the error. A possible replacement line,though, could be "I may be a shining light"

    Lastly, you should really include some punctuation in this poem because you are expressing entire thoughts, even if they are long and spread out.

    Just my thoughts, though.

    Great job, overall!


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    May 14

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    Lovely!

    Keep this prayer in your heart always & strive to do your best for Him and your life will be a prayer! So glad I made it here today to read this 'cause I needed my spirit lifted & this helped me!


  • SpeakLove93
    May 5

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    Beautiful

    This is such a beautiful prayer. I love the way it was written and its flow. Im not a dancer but I can see how important it is to you. Very nicely done and thank you for entering!


  • Antebellum
    April 19
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    lol the applaud didnt work the first time

  • Antebellum
    April 19
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    beautifuly writen prayer.
    Love the first stanza.

  • andrew houtman silver member
    April 18
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    This is very inspirational. Very good flow. Nice job


  • trekkergirl
    April 18

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    This is a very nicely written prayer. I felt very inspired by reading this. I liked it. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering it into our reading lists.

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