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The Withdrawal Method





I try not to love y o u ;;

You're eyes are like Diamonds;;

millions of people have killed to kiss them
[&you know I'm no acception.]

I remember when you said I was your d a r l i n g -

first time you laid your venomous mouth on my collarbone I was 13 years old
(of course you knew, it was your home goal.)


Everytime I pulled away, you pulled me c.l.o.s.e.r.

Everytime I gave up, you said I'm still your l:o:v:e:r

& everytime I believed in you I found myself

                                                   F

                                                   u     e d

                                                c    k         o v e r.

I know it's ::TooLate:: to hold you in my arms but I just want to feel your fingers through my hair again

& savour every strawberry scented scandal you put me [(through)]


I'm afraid this time it's too late to love again -


Don't you hate GooDBye ((it hurts more when you say it outloud))

Author notes

17/150


&It's not like you noticed me smile all those years ago.


M i d n i g h t - x - R o s e



Ha yeah about the ex again... Nice.
Oooh & the colouring blue & red is to represent man and woman, as in like in sexual positioning

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  • great poem why did you need all that extra stuff? i think it just distracted from the real beauty in your poem.



    The Positives:
    I like the emotion and imagery


    Room For Improvement:
    I really didn't like the style it was way to flashy and made no improvement what so ever. In fact it destracted.



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    I give this an 5/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • endless-lover silver member
    April 17
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    nicely done doll, thanks for entering best to you :]

    vanna