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a Self is not enough



old Spring comes lightly
nuzzled by thoughts of what was
and what never will




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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 21
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    Philosophical.


  • DogFish silver member
    April 18

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    ...sounds like those days of spring whan the snow is not quite gone, the trees are bare, the sun is bright but a cool wind from the north just keeps that carefree summer feeling at bay!


  • Heath Thompson
    April 18
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    Nothing wrong with this in my eyes

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 17

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    You're on a roll.

    I think this speaks universally, though in some sense it reads personal to me, maybe because I know you. Probably because I know you.

    Anyway, lol

    universally, I think we all cast things off come Spring, whether by cleaning or adding or removing something from our life. it's a pattern i notice in people this time of year, everyone is doing it - somehow.

    it is regeneration
    kinda scary, really
    but not a bad thing

    new is good
    new is opportunity

    i'm feeling optimistic right now, though

    lol