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Mr. Jones

 

 

 

cereal and toast,
always cereal and toast
even after he retired,
it didn’t feel right
starting the day without breakfast


not the same since Doris died
but it gave his life some reason, some purpose;
the kitchen seemed cold
even in summer

he listened to the news
and planned out his day;
keeping busy was becoming harder


the garden immaculate - her pride and joy
he smiled as he pictured her,
floppy hat, faded jeans and gloves,
humming to herself as she pruned roses,
planted borders and weeded,

it was his job now,
he enjoyed the challenge
and it kept her memory alive


he sat on the bed and sighed,
every night he would tell Doris
about his day, his life,

he switched out the light,
told her he loved her
and that he would soon join her

 

 


a single tear formed
in the corner of his closed eye

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt - Your job is to personify a person and give a snapshot of their life.

My character is Mr. Arthur Jones

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  • omg... i am LITERALLY in tears.. omg.
    this contest is going to be impossible to judge.. this is so terribly sad... i really love how this is written. a fantastic job. really.

    thanks so much for entering!
    and best of luck in the contest!
    -Lady Michaella-


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 23
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      Thank you so much for the silver and the comment. I like to make my people as real as possible and I know a couple of people just like Mr. Jones.

      It was a fun contest ... thank you.

      Sue x


  • LittleMoon silver member
    April 22

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    What a beautiful write. How true to life for a couple who have been married for a long life time and then one has gone. Marriages used to be like that, couples did everything together so take away one and the other was lost. Now marriages hardly ever last long enough and people tend to still have their own hobbies and not make their spouse their entire existence. Sheila


  • arafura gold member
    April 18
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    Very poignant glimpse at the life of Mr Jones. Wonderfully well expressed!


  • Legend silver member
    April 17

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    What a sad refection on the way some lives are lived after the loss of a loved one. To live the rest of ones life as if nothing change with their going.
    I guess though if it gives comfort and meaning to their lives that is enough.Not my idea as to how to live out the rest of ones own.
    A truly wonderful piece with deep feeling, Good luck in the contest


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 18
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      Thank you for reading and leaving a comment and your best wishes.

      Sue x

  • sigh, we are odd bunnies trying to keep things the same when the reality is the whole world has changed for us overnight. Why do we do it?

    Hugs Sis this is a beautiful write

    Jem

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 18
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      Many thanks Sis, I sometimes think people cling to the past because they are afraid of the future, I guess this is what Arthur Jones was trying to do.

      Suz


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 17

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    Mr Jones, your life has been painted in superb detail, keep Grace close, she needs you


    Great stuff

    Jeff

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