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The Castle in the fens








Part the First,
A Gentle Journey

On their gentle journey to the Wyrms,
they will carry their caskets,
and cascades,
through the storms
they will be leaded down,
drained
they will carry a heavy gloom,
a doom, the grapes of wrath in bloom;
on the journey to the Wyrms
Where Shadow dances with Deep Regret,
pale so pale under veils.

How crass, Fool.

Such a gentle journey,
to the Wyrms, I mean,
to another
wheel of dreams
another well of Wishing.

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  • Desiree Darkk
    March 7, 2004
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    Hmmm didn't see this first of the trio or is that a troilet? I reverberate my first comment. Very subtle. lol.


  • myrataal silver member
    March 7, 2004
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    Wyrmstatic

    The Wheel of Dreams is in the Heart of Secrets. We wishing-wellers, searching the Well of wishing. Do not wish or dream too much, for deeds may built the Castle in the Ferns.

    (Did you know that moss may cover the best part of down-to-earth love? After the Wyrms, we may try the Skyrms, and sleeping in THOSE rms we may find LOVE's rms ...

    Now close your mouth, Poet ... I may become a fly ...

    Myra

  • Odyssey
    March 7, 2004
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    Ody bemuddled, befuddled, and generally bemused. But she likes it when Lute poems do this to her. I will have to read a few more times to deconstruct this pretty thing...but it would seem that the journey is more important than the destination, even though when we get there, we get to make our dreams.

    Also, only part one, I do believe.

    Will go read more.

    ooh and some of these ...