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Surfing Waves

I step in to the water
With my swimsuit on and my surfing board in my hand
I start with a simple paddle
Waiting patiently for the waves to start
Here comes one, a good one to start with
I paddle faster, and this time I am headed towards it
It’s here! I rapidly stand up and am in the tube of water
The tube is starting to fade I have to get out!
The exit is a little far about a meter or two
I get my courage together and head out
Crash! The wave collapse behind me
I head to shore, and lie on the warm sand
A little afterwards I look up and shout
“Here comes another one!”  
I rise for the sand and into the water
To have a thrilling ride again

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  • nilav
    April 20
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    not used to surfing waves ...but enjoyed your poem


  • maralisa silver member
    April 17
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    a wonderful write thank you for sharingmaralisa