*verse 1*
Every single time I'm with you
Finding the right thing to say is hard
And finally you can see me too
From the days of emotion to the day it's through
And I'm waiting(waiting)
For you to find me here
But are you willing(willing)
To let me take off your fear
*chorus*
'Cause sometimes life grabs us
Takes us to places
Meeting new faces
And measuring the spaces
Today and tomorrow will pass
Without you knowing
Without me showing
The tears now flowing
From my eyes....
I'm wearing a disguise(3x)
*verse 2*
Keeping my word every time
Pulling you closer to me
Now I'm done the climb
Even though it's all just in my mind
But you're stubborn (stubborn)
Can't you see my face
And I'm stubborn (stubborn)
I don't know my place
<<*chorus*>>
<<*repeat chorus, again*>>
Why did you say bye-bye?
Can't you see though this disguise?
Author notes
This is sort of rnb-soft rock-ish. Sort of RihannaxJennifer Hudson style of song.... (even though I'm a guy)
A contest entry
- Write a Love Song... to Yourself! by Loveberry.
1500 points, ended April 27, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
constructive critism only... hehe
Comments
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oh yeah- i am def loving this piece!!! i like the feel of it and the repetition you've got going on, great job!!!
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thank you SOOOOOOOO much! tooo bad i wasn't able to finish it on time though.... hahaha. hey, uhm.... next time you'll host a contest, uhmm..... message me so that i can join.... thanks..... XD
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haha never a problem!! if you have me as a fav, then everytime i open a contest you'll get an automatic message about it
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oh man! i just wish you would finish it... soooo much potential here! and btw, rihanna and jennifer hudson are some of my faves
good luck!
and really- please finish it and message me when you do! -
sorry
Sorry bt the song is incomplete *sigh*
sorry! even though the contest is over, i guess i have to finish it!! -
Its a good start I would have liked to see more verses or your just going to make the lead guitarist happy he has a two minute solo
well done
Cyber Artist
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