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Smell of Red

Fresh baked

All-American

Warm

Apple Pie

 

With tons of

Sugar and sweet cinnamon

And cruchy

Light-brown crust

 

 

Sweet 16

Birthday gift

Firetruck red

Convertible with

  

Leather seats

Doncha' love that

brand new

Car smell

 

 

4 years old

first day at school

To excited

To sleep

 

So sat there

and inhaled the

smell of the red rubber

nap-time mat

 

 

Mommy can we keep it

It followed us all the way home 

We will take care of him

We promise

 

Smelly, Stinky

Playful Puppy

Named

Red

 

 

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 18

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    Oh I love cinnamon now what is a better smell and taste? Especially on apple pie and crumble oooh


    • MemeMassacre
      April 22
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      oo i kno i have a major sweet tooth right now too
      and unfortunately im on a diet


  • just mercedes gold member
    April 17

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    Yes, I like this! Colour, flavour, touch, a sensory delight. I had forgotten the new car smell and your words recalled it. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Princess Cuddle Bug
    April 17

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    i like it =) very descriptive! puts the images right into my head without a problem! ts great

    ~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~

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