Psshhh please dollface;
I lived the college life
In high school
& let.me.tell.you
{its overrated}
Youre not worth getting angry over any more
I realized,
[Im beyond you]
Ive been cleaning up after myself since I was 6
and here you are in your early 20's
You don't even know what chlorox is
If youre willing to pay the fee
Live as you please
But I have something better going for me
& you .wont. bring me down
you .couldnt. if you tried
So dont bother playing nice to my face
& running behind my back
Because doll I see it too
& if I cared enough, Id finish you
x
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my twin sis...you have never failed to amuse me. your words come out so beautifully. you are always telling me that you are jealous because of my ryhme but you dont realize that i envy you most for the flow...it just comes out soooo perfect and the dirty pretty style. I have tried so hard to grasp the concept and it always looks like shit. but you have truly mastered the art and i bow down to thee....*bows down and offers words of praise* hehehe... my wish is to finally be as good as you one day....you are the master.....or....mistress...yeah....mistress...
love you like a sis
DM
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chlorox is supposed to be clorox, unless that is a deliberate typo. But this was a great write. I loved the tiny use of excess punctuation, it complemented the poem nicely and didn't drown it. Loved it!
"Because doll I see it too
& if I cared enough, Id finish you"
very chilling, I like!
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Reminds me of my older sister, who, being 3 years older than me, should be cleaning up after herself by now, but I don't have enough fingers to count the times my family, me in particular, has helped her pick herself up from the messes she makes of her life.
-Sigh, I liked the ending, it is a good, final line to end on. I like that your words aren't sugarcoated.
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If youre willing to pay the fee
Live as you please
But I have something better going for me
Those are my favourite lines.
There's so much power to this poem, so much strength.
It's beautifully written n.n
Always good to read a new write by you hun.
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Well Putt
Very nicely said here Sarah. I cangather from this writ that it is a vent poem and you're frustrated with someone and im sure ther eis reaosn behind it but no need to explain
your thoughts were well placed into this poem and I admire ya for posting this because its the best way to alleviate your frustration. any ways hopefully things will continue to get better for you and life treats ya well. thanks for sharing this with us and glad to see ya post something. 
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