Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
In through the nose
Out through the mouth
Yet here I sit
Trying to catch my breath
Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
Concentrate on what I'm doing
There is no air to be found
Someone hurry
Catch me before I hit the ground
Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
Back up fast
Your taking up too much space
Can you not see
I can not breathe
Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
Suffocating
All alone
No one sees
Or even helps me
Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
It's now cold and dark
I hear voices echoing
And someone screams
I feel like I'm floating in a dream
Breathe breathe
I can't breathe
I've suffocated
and now I'm dead
Couldn't they see
That I could not breathe
It doesn't matter if you have all the people in the world to talk to, you still have to find the strength to say in words, what you would normally say on your skin
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love it.
this described exactly how I feel right now. Good job.
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i agree
rather than a suffocating feeling, i get a choking feeling in bad situations. the "breather breath i cant breathe" set the tone.
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Great Poem, Love the repetition, it adds to the effect. Great Write
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Thanks for finding my poem. Came to see one of yours. If you can relax, your body will breathe by itself. What you need is a purpose...
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great work! i love the repetition, it makes for the feel of a song. inspired my BFMV is it?
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inspired my BFMV is it?
I dont understand...hmm
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Nice job. I am not a great fan of line repetition in poems. You, however, have used it very effectively. It adds to the sense of suffocation. Very well done.
Mike
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thanks...!
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