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Run away

I Somethimes wish I could hide my face
Run away to my own little place
In this place there's no one but me
No one to fight, No one to see
My own little place that I could confide
I wish I could just run away!

Author notes

It was my first poem.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 18, 2009

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is a really good poem, especially for a first! - I like the idea of having somewhere to call my own, this is a great expression of that desire I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at fixing "Somethimes" to "sometimes" - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


    Polly
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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    April 16, 2009

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    It can be difficult to get through life and sometimes we all feel like this; I think you've expressed your desire well in just a few lines - the only suggestions I have is to maybe add a comma or full stop somewhere to help the flow, and perhaps not start every line with a capital letter, it indicates a new thought

    Great write!

    Keep writing!
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    ~Manda
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