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Happiness

Merely not a brand new toy,

Two best friends will share.

Full of pleasure, full of joy.

Found almost anywhere.

 

 

 

It is like a shooting star,

Flying through the deep blue night.

Hurry, quickly make your wish

Before it is out of sight.

 

 

 

Just like your favorite music,

It may make you dance.

But, dance like no ones watching,

For you may not get a second chance.

 

 

 

Friendship, love, and this

Are three things we

Most long for.

 

 

 

But without the the last,

Happiness,

The others are worthless.

 

 

 

So fill your heart with joy,

Share your love with friends,

Make a wish on a shooting star,

And don't forget to dance.

 

 

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  • Never Known
    May 13
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    GREAT

    ITs so cute... and amazing. I LOVE IT!


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    April 23

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    I liked this.
    It made me smile.
    It made me feel happy. I enjoyed the background and the fontage.
    Something i don't see very often .
    Good luck,And thanks for entering


  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 18

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is a really good poem - I like the joy that comes through this poem, it is a really powerful emotion and you have done this really well I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at a spelling error of "whatching" that should be "watching" and also not capitalising the first letter of every line, when it isn't the start of a new sentence it can disrupt the flow a little - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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    • MemeMassacre
      April 18
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      thank you i wrote it in like 7th grade in English class my teacher (who thinks im an idiot) searched all over the net thinking i forged it but he couldnt find nuttin i think its pretty funny oh and also thanks for pointing out the mispell i always seem to mispell that word


  • trekkergirl
    April 17

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    This is very interesting. I like the background... bright suns. I also like the font you used. Made your poem stand out a little bit.

    I also, liked the poem itself... happiness is a good thing to achieve.

    • MemeMassacre
      April 22
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      thank you
      im naturally a pessmistic person
      but i try to change that
      and happiness is a wonderful thing to achieve

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