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Shadows

Shadowing a skylark, where night parted broken
grit, alone stand yearning for the day to knives fall,
this face dream surrender of innocence spoken,

shimmering the dream all that hides night in squall,
glisten of pain among words strong softspoken
never to surrender all this darkness of scrawl.

Author notes

Prompt:

Harrisham Rhyme


This form consists of a six-line rhyming stanza.
In this form, the last letter of the first word of each line is the first letter of the first word of next line.
There is no restriction on the starting letter of the first line.


Rhyming scheme : ababab.

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  • Harrisham Minhas
    April 27

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    Nicely expressed.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Harrisham Minhas

    • kendhal22
      April 27

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      Thank you

      Thank you for coaching me on this form. I'm sure I will do it again in the next contest. This been a wonderful experince for me learning this form. Thank you again for wonderful comment given to my poem. Kendhal22

      • Harrisham Minhas
        April 28
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        I am glad that you enjoyed writing in this form
        Looking forward to reading more of your poems in this form.



  • Harrisham Minhas
    April 16
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    Please rectify this poem according to this rule of the form:

    "In this form, the last letter of the first word of each line is the first letter of the first word of next line."

    You can refer to the given example poem to make this rule clear.




    • kendhal22
      April 16
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the comment given. Sorry I that it was the last letter of the last word. Thanks again. Kendhal22

    • kendhal22
      April 16
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      Thank you

      Thank you for pointing that out to me. I want back and correct the problem. Kendhal22

      • Harrisham Minhas
        April 16
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        I appreciate your efforts.
        I think you got a bit confused with the rule.
        It says " the last letter of the first word of each line is the first letter of the first word of next line"... it is first word...not last word.


        Please rectify this poem.


  • Short but cute
    April 16
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    I like it. Really good. Love the wording.

    • kendhal22
      April 16
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      Thank you

      Thank you for this wonderful comment given to my poem. This is the first doing this form. Kendhal22

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