He is the only one who knows the words to the song my heart sings;
the only one who bears the water I must drink,
and without his touch, or the life of his love,
I would simply cease to be.
A contest entry
- "Soul Mates" - Give me one sentence poems... by Priya1989.
625 points, ended April 28, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hi there, thanks for entering my contest.
I would first srongly suggest that you either change your font or the background of your page - it's very difficult to read your piece in the colour format that it is, so that has kind of putt me off to begin with quite frankly.
Nonetheless, the piece itself - I enjoyed reading it (after the struggle to actually see it properly). I like the idea of knowing the words to the song your heart sings, and the second line especially was something original I thought. I love the inversion of the 'love of his life' to be 'life of his love' - good idea.
Best of luck with this piece. -
AWWWWWWW so lovely. Love such an endless subject. Good job. Please feel free to read and comment on my works as as well. Thank you
Rabbit
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