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Car Crash

A loud crash echoes,

through the placid night.

Screeching tires bellow,

as a girl cries in fright.

 

I rush to the mangled car,

totalled beyond repair.

With the smell of booze,

and blood flowing from her hair.

 

I see liquid rapidly running from the car,

so I pull her out and run towards home.

I calm her cries of pain and drunken panic,

As I stare at the cars of steel, and chrome.

 

This gentle girl decided to drink,

and drove herself behind a wheel.

Perhaps was fate she didn't hit the oak tree,

instead God saved her life by my automobile. 

 

In the after math of this big mess,

I walk away with food for thought.

When you drink you pretend to only drive,

and forget everything you're ever taught.

Author notes

Tonight I witnessed something I hope i'll never have to see again. A drunk girl hit my parked car head on just missing a huge oak tree by six inchs. My car was totalled, and hers folded like an acordian. I ran to her aid, and she had a gush on her forhead from hitting the steering wheel. She wasn't wearing a seat belt. I say she was a lucky one. I pulled her from the car because she was unable to get out. Blood was everywhere and I pray to God she will be ok. That is one thing I wish to never see again the rest of my life, but if it shall ever happen I will do the same thing as I did before. I leave no fallen person behind, and I hope everyone will do the same for me. Tonight made me realize just how precious life truly is, and until you find yourself in a life or death situation you truly won't understand what it means to live. Everyone be safe, buckle up, and remember you only get one life so live it well! Thanks for reading..

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  • Aalta
    September 28

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    so descriptive.... the images are very powerful makes me feel as if I am right there....

    this is so sad.... I hope whatever reason made her do something so rash is sorted out soon.... Life is so precious... not to be wasted...


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    July 19
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    this is completely excellent you have real raw gut talent
    bravo


  • Ann45 gold member
    July 9

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    Very well penned indeed, and surely leave food for thought For those about to and those that have driven whilst drunk.


  • movedon
    June 19

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    My best friend died a year ago in May. I applaud you for your quick thinking. And sorry to hear about your car. But this is a fine write Ryan. Really, it was well penned.

    xx
    mylee


  • Brand
    June 18
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    wow. it's amazing that you reacted like that. most people would have frozen


  • Wolfdog silver member
    June 18

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    Superb Plus +

    'tis a very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well on a very serious subject. Thanks for sharing this one with us. I had a most unusual experience, many years ago, you might like to check out my anti-drunk driving poem, its called:
    "Don't Drive Drunk...Pink Elephants Ahead". Here's a link: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2865562


  • here for you always
    June 13

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    This was a great poem. Its sad that it happened but i believe that everything happens for a reason. It good that nobody was seriously hurt. Its good you helped her out. Not alot of people think about others these days. Keep up the good work.


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    June 6
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    I Loved this Ryan this was so awesome keep on writing Searra


  • mysterious.angel
    May 28
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    wow this is amazing


  • XXWolfOfInsanityxX
    May 9

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    Dear fellow poet Ryan,
    I'm sorry you had to go through this. It's quite heart breaking and painful. I bet you were afraid when it happened because sometimes actions speak louder then words themselves. This is such a sad write. It's filled with sadness, pain and bless. I am so glad that you are alright and the girl as well. I hope she is doing fine and everything. I am sorry that you have to experience this in your life. Then again everyone has to experience something they don't want or don't expect to learn. You did a wonderful thing coming to her aid and need of help. You're truly a wonderful person and I am sure she is thankful that you saved her. Sometimes things happened without us even expecting them too. Thanks so much for this heartfelt piece. It made me cry because I had a best friend. She was drinking and she wanted to drive herself home she didn't listen to any of her friends including me. So that night when she was driving home she ran into a tree... and died.... that same fateful night I told myself I will never drink and I won't start. I never drank before and I am not starting. Life is very precious just not many people see it that way because they get hurt a lot and I am learning because I am one of those people. I am slowly learning that life is beautiful. and for one thing life is what you make it because your the creator of your own life. :] thanks so much for sharing this once again. I really enjoyed reading this. Sorry if this is the longest comment you received from someone after all I am just a teenage girl trying to enjoy her life.

    - Maria ♥

    P.s.I learn something from this poem. I found the meaning behind it so thank you for teaching me something


  • Love Sparked
    April 24

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    I lovved it. That was so good. I fele bad for what happened. I was in a car accident twice, and was almost killed both times. Wow.

  • Axcess Denied
    April 22

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    !!!!!!!!!

    Ry Ry the hero!!! Hip hip hooray!! Good man, Ryan, good man. Sorry about your car though, but maybe it saved her life?? The world may never know... Glad youre one of the few that forgets about themselves in order to help others in times of need like that. Ive seen bad accidents where people that stopped (MEN) wouldnt go near the vehicle because there was gas leaking. Good thing my bf was there to get the girl out because everyone else there was telling him to get away because it was on fire, not even caring that she was still in the car... Really makes you think huh? Good write, Ry!!


  • nightingale
    April 16
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    i read again and still got goosebumps! its like i am there and can see it.


  • starlight--x
    April 16
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    this is just.. wow.
    i love it.
    it's so vivid.
    and by gosh, we have a hero in our midst.
    xx


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 16

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    Skreaching tires bellow,
    screeching

    you did a good job on this. thank you for sharing this with me and i hope your message gets out. viyanna rosemarie


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 16

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    wow! I had a experience like that one time...You are a real hero. The world needs more people like you...I like your writing style. You totally told your story in rhyme. The flow was easy and didn't seem forced. what a great way to share your experience. I hope you will be okay and I hope she will be too...thanks for sharing your story...peace to you always in all ways...
    -Kendal


  • Ray Von
    April 16

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    This reminds me of Tim Burton for some reason... I think it would sound awesome in a song.

    I'm sorry about the circumstances. I guess a real experience is easier to express and describe. Well done

    MAria


  • j2step
    April 16

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    man dat is wikked u cool?


  • Only waiting on ---
    April 16

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    wow

    i've seen around the same type of stuff its pretty brutal but hey live through it and get stronger from it


  • UnionFireBug09
    April 16

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    A wonderful write, very descriptive. I've been to many accidents like that working between the fire department and the ambulance service. You were incredible to pull her from her car. Most people just stare dumbly at the accident, in a state of shock from witnessing it. Congrats on being cool headed and a quick thinker! And you'd be surprised what people can live through. an overall great write!


  • memoriesofyou
    April 16

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    Woah!

    Woah! The imagery in this is astonishing! Brilliant write, you left me speechless. I felt like I was watching it happen.

  • drapedindarkness
    April 16

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    Touching The Reapers Scythe

    Having also seen a horrific crash, mangled cars and bones, I respect the words you use, The lyrics and the tones, I hope to never see the likes again and wish the same for you, Life is very precious, i wish more knew it was true.


  • Akers
    April 16
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    An hour ago!! Woa. How you feeling? Is the girl ok? I s'pose that'll explain why it's easy to read if it's so fresh in your mind. I think my writing is the best when it just pours out of me. If you don't mind me asking...what's the girls name? I'm curious lol Thanks for the welcoming :-) xx


  • Akers
    April 16

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    Touching. You rescue her, so we feel satisfied because that's what we want to read. In reality life, you don't want to see the blood and guts, but it's inevitable in this situation, and I like how to delicately say "and blood flowing from her hair". Letting us know, it was real. Well done on a great piece and for doing the right thing xxx


    • Ryan gold member
      April 16
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      :)

      Thank you for your comment. I'm still a little shaken up since it was only but a hour ago this happened. I'd also like to welcome you to all poetry. You'll find this place is very lit up with life, and beautiful poetry. I hope you stay for longer then awhile, and get to enjoy the splender it offers, and indulge in a few smiles.


  • Captain Blackthatch
    April 16
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    By the horns of Nick n’ by the eternal Jesus ye may call me dogsbody if I don’t believe that this be a grande, good piece of litteryture, arrgh. By the blood in me heart I swear that if any chicken-hearted land-lubber says diff’rent I shall run ‘im through ‘n carve his gizzard n’ fry it for me supper.


    • Ryan gold member
      April 16
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      haha..

      You're starting to disturb me.. haha I'm quite concerned about your current state of mind at the moment.


      • Captain Blackthatch
        April 16

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        I be Cap’n Blackthatch an’ I bid ye good’ay n’ how d’ye do. I hope the Lord prospers yer handy works as grande n’ fine as I be findin’ em. I’m glad for to clap eyes at ye.

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