It's a cold, cold night
and as I hold her tight,
I'm wondering where her mind has wandered to.
'Cause my love is still so strong,
Oh, but it's been so long,
since I believed,
she really loved me, too.
With her hands around a book, and
that, "I'm not with you look."
I'm longing to take her in my arms and ask her "Why?"
Oh, I'm sure it would be good
and I only wish I could,
but I'm so afraid she'd only lie.
I'm looking for some proof,
but I'm not sure I want the truth,
I'm just wondering,
and hoping her love's not dead.
'Cause I'm thinking for our sake,
this is a silence I can't break.
I know ......
some thing's are better left unsaid.
Author notes
Prompt: "Let's be honest with each other before we start pretending"
A contest entry
- "Let's be honest with each other before we start pretending" by JinSays.
706 points, ended May 10, 20 entries
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With her hands around a book, and
that, "I'm not with you look."
I'm longing to take her in my arms and ask her "Why?"
Oh, I'm sure it would be good
and I only wish I could,
but I'm so afraid she'd only lie.
Brilliant! Thank you.
Love,
jin -
Hey this was an interesting write for an interesting prompt... your use of imagery was excellent as always my friend. Great job and thanks for sharing this with us.
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This is a really good piece, I was a little put off with the line breaks a few didn't quite seem to flow perfectly maybe it's just me. Well done here.
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Beautifully said. sometimes You think silence is golden, but all you end up with is coal
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a wonderful write for the promt so full of depth and feeling throughout good luck in the contest
maralisa
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Beautiful flow of the unforced rhyme scheme--
Very well constructed and an excellent take on the prompt--
Very, very Well Done & Best of Luck in the Contest!
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