as he held her frail hand
skin loose and saggy
she told him she must go
her master was calling
he had a lone tear fall
for his wife of sixty years
he knew he must go too
so he prayed to God
my father, please take me
our love cannot be broken
we must be together to exist
take us both among your midst
when he opened his eyes
he looked all around them
they were holding hands in glory
both youthful and healthy
they could love for eternity
Author notes
Oh my sweetheart ! I love you, I love you and I love you...Unknown.
Prompt: what you DO speaks so loudly that i cannot hear what you SAY
(his actions were so louder than words)
A contest entry
- Our Wedding Reception by MichaelSavage.
900 points, ended April 18, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love beyond death by Minstrel-Morose.
700 points, ended April 27, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - and I love you... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended August 31, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me something real- let me feel it! by lillypilly.
3100 points, ended May 3, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want poems about grief here by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended May 19, 80 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of the Best!! by DramaQueen469.
2000 points, ended June 8, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie-PW by crivanea.
400 points, ended July 9, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Well Done....
..... Love can last an eternity. I am however not going to talk religious aspects here not appropriate, I will say that there have been arrangements made for such love by our Heavenly Father!
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this is very beautiful...the love..the happiness..and the moment shared..I think you did quite a good job with this piece..the love you speak of it is something that is beyond comprehension..something that I believe depends on time..and distance..but you tied it well with God...good job
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this very lovely
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A heartbreaking write, deserving of all its trophies and then some
Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!
Maria
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A deeply touching and poignant poem penned with a lot of feeling and empathy. Congratulations on the silver trophy- you surely deserved it.
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This is a truly wonderful write. And I truly loved the picture which I thought went wonderfully with it. I can't say enough about this wonderful write except thanks for sharing it with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Thank you for entering the contest. Your poem was amazing. Unfortunately it doesn't follow the rules of the contest. Your poem has already won a trophy so this poem has been removed from the contest. Thanks Kahy
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Ah..just beautiful verse..love the concept and the depth of athe universal warmness around the words..well done..
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excellent~
This is excellent
True love until death does up part indeed
My very first reads of one of your poems so nice to meet you
I entered this contest too but didn't win....and that is okay..........I can see why this was chosen..
Congrats on the Silver Trophy
I removed my poem..but if you want to give it a read it is called Somewhere in Time.....
Again I loved this the pic and background too
Congrats
Susan~~
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Wow love beyond time that transcends to the heavens such beauty.
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You have captured the loyalty of "too death us do part" In imagery you paint the wrinkled hands and face so creatively...uncoditional love looks beyond the wrinkles as find love blooming healthily..
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This so sweet and touching. A beautiful picture of soul mates never parting. You did the picture justice.
Hubby Bill
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Thanx for the encouragement even us oldies gettin around in zimmerframes can look forward ...tis truly a beautiful poem dear Sis...better go now must apply some more wrinkle cream
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this is bloody fantastic. such a lovely vision! would love to be part of this poem when i get old. nice write x
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That is probably one of the sweetest things I have read in a long time! Good luck and thank you for entering
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Great poem for us. We plan on growing old together. Thank you for this lovely worded piece.
Michael
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Beautiful
The picture your words everything about this is absolutely beautiful. Well done I love this work ,you have outdone yourself......chael applause indeed a standing ovation
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Maria this is so touching honey...they could love for eternity.. I know they can...good luck in the contest sweet sis Hugs Angel♥
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