The luminescent shadow from city lights show us that pretty things can be ugly underneath. I shield my eyes from the promise tonight will change everything I hold as values.
My vodka glass tips toward my mouth and my lips get coated in denial.
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You tell me that maybe we are not destined; and I ignore the probability that that is true. Then you take my hand, count to ten, and leave. I was crying by the syllable ‘three’.
With my head in arctic waters you made sure I was just below freezing point before you strained my arm and yanked me out of the ice. I was gasping in violent tremors for oxygen and was scared all that was left was the carbon dioxide infiltrating your lungs.
Then, with disgusted words you insinuated that what I donned as real was a hideously overt façade. I hated the fact you were right then, and right now.
With burning eyes you wrenched my heart from my chest and shoved realism down my bones. You made sure the clarity couldn’t escape and cemented my ribs to my blood. I felt heavy with the logic you instilled so perfectly against my soul and was scared the world was just a cellophane covering of intentions not for the better.
If there was anything this taught me it is that science is not important, which is good because I never understood the difference between implode and explode. In the end they both break under pressure.
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You stole the vodka glass from my guilty palm.
Author notes
Prompt: "Let's be honest with each other before we start pretending"
A contest entry
- ANYTHING GOES!! PIF by Jade.Butterfly.
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if i was improper grammer, would you have the heart to correct me?
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Oh I really love this write.
That's about all the words I can summon now
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Fantastic. The close was perfect, thank you again.
Im really starting to see some growth in your writing, even from the last few entries I've read. I see some wonderful talent emerging. You're gonna be another poetic prodigy, like my AP daughter, huh?
Excellent.
I am impressed, thank you.
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wow; that's incredibly kind of you.
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"With burning eyes you wrenched my heart from my chest and shoved realism down my chest."
I think you over used the word "chest", maybe you should change the second one to "throat"?
Either way, I agree with all the below comments, this is fantastic, and your vocabulary is so broad.
I loved this;
"If there was anything this taught me it is that science is not important, which is good because I never understood the difference between implode and explode. In the end they both break under pressure."
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ah; thanks so much. I really hate using the same word twice.
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Wowzers!
This was absoloutley amazing!
I'm in awe .Your word choices were delightful!
So full of emotion and im ecstatic . I simply loved this piece. good luck in contest and thank you for enetering -
Wonderfully poetic prose so full of emotion.
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Your vocabulary pleases me to no end- and while I'm normally no fan of prose, this made my day. It paints such an amazing picture in my head, with situations of the norm, and metaphors and references of the not. You take a cliche situation- and make it new again. Great job
-LivingEmptySpaces
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Wow thank you:]
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Wow! I like it , its different but really really good.
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