The Ex;
How I hated my life, from that day on,
The girl I had dated turned out nothing but a con.
She said she loved me, but we seemed not to work
So now I'll turn to my dimwitted quirk.
She was my everything, for that whole two weeks were together,
I felt like I could be with her forever.
Her eyes so blue... no wait, they were green,
I wonder if my poor, lonesome blood will have a fine sheen.
Oh, woe is me, no one is ever there...
Maybe it's because I now refuse to wash my hair.
I sob and I cry and I call up dear Sheryll... or was it Ellen?
And I tell her that I miss her breasts; like melons.
Hesitantly, I wipe away my tears and take out the razorblade,
Taking it to my wrist, hoping to cut away the pain she made.
I take a deep breath close my eyes; seeking my redemption...
Put down the blade... What can I say? I just wanted a little attention.
The Insecurity;
Oh my,
Oh dear,
The scale says what I fear,
I've gained 2 pounds - it's terribly clear!
Call up my friends,
They say I'm dumb,
And I tell them how numb,
I feel inside my bum.
My mother,
She said,
I have nothing to dread,
How can she understand that if I'm not empty I'll be dead!
The people,
They're fat,
They'd never understand the way I feel when I am flat!
Oh drat!
Take now,
This knife,
I tell them all I will; end life!
I say I'm tired of all this endless strife!
They come,
They pray,
More wander each each day to say,
They love the way I look, and feel and sigh and cry and Hey!
They turn,
From me,
Say there's nothing left to see here...
Mustn't let them leave here!
I run,
Onto my window on the 3rd story,
Tell them it will be gory,
It will be a sad end to my story!
They cry and say,
No please don't go away.
I smile, and they cheer
Though they know not that they had nothing to fear.
Why would, I fall,
From such a scary place?
For it would ruin - all!
The pretty of my face!
It was just beyond their comprehension,
That I,
That I,
THAT I!
Just wanted a little attention...
Author notes
Not finished yet... really tried to make it seem funny...
A contest entry
- Suicide is for Pussies! Write me something a little less cliche by Fibe Kill-DFW Punk-.
400 points, ended April 19, 13 entries
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Comments
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very peculiar
It had a nice flow to it, and the rhymes would seem forced if they werent comical. But it was a good piece and the little "or were they green" kinda bits made me laugh. I think you had a nice idea with the piece and i can see why on the contest it was entered into. ps im rambling and i think a lil out of it, but thats ok, kk bye ~jack

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Very good, you captured the metnality perfectley, you were right on target, and it was very well written, i liked how it flowed but also how it was jumpy when it needed to be. keep it up and good luck in my contest
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It is funny and serious at the same time. great job with the rhyme also Lil Bit. I really like this one.





