I dont feel good today
I fell like Shit
This life is getting too hard
I must admit
I have a destination
A place not of this world
I have always hated my life
And these taunts aregetting old
I'm just going to go home
And end it all
And cut mywrists
Untill my blood comes to a fall
I take my friend
Slid it across my arm
There is nothing about this life
That i will ever miss
Iknow I hit the spot
My vein shoots out red
My door gets busted open
Someone finds me nearly dead
They bring me beyond my will
My will was to die
I tried to die
But I survived
Author notes
ok there are like 2 more parts but i cant find them but when i do i'll make sure you know 
A contest entry
- Dark writes contest!!!! Check it out by Englandgirl2008.
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Comments
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good write i loved it great flow good luck ni the contest
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this is really realistic and emotive make me get flashbacks
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thanx
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wow
this was just amazing. wow. lol that's all I can say.
Imagery/30
Style/40
background/30
Prompt used/0
Prewrite/10
fresh write/0
Points: 110
this was just amazing. Thanks for entering and good luck.
My fave parts were:
I take my friend
Slid it across my arm
There is nothing about this life
That i will ever miss
Iknow I hit the spot
My vein shoots out red
My door gets busted open
Someone finds me nearly dead -
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and again thanx
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awe good write... very sad but i totally know where ur coming from... i also love your page by the way!
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lolz thanx ...and thanx
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wow
you made me laugh when you said," Iknow I hit the spot" and, "My door gets busted open" IDK why but its probably because i have friends who are sick minded. but it sounds cool.........
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no that you thonk about it its pretty hilarious
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i know the other two parts!!! so sad! i love you!
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This is absolutely amazing!!! I loved it! But you better not do it or I'll bring you back and kill you myself Find the other parts and tell your new counselor I said hi lol love you Serena!!
~Kayla
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amazing
i really like this one....i think the counselor would tooo haahahahaha lolz
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wow thats a really good write. make sure u find the other parts!!
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sounds cool...I like it so far...find the other parts soon
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... don't do this, coming from someone who feels like this all the time not worth it.... you made it his far why give up now
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well its like a 3 part thing its about some girl (not me)
and the first 2 poems she tries to kill herself and in the 3rd one she finds someone she loves and they die together -
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oh ok
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