Yes

My stomach is left in knots,
the aroma of yesterday-
lingers.

(I can hardly control myself)

Every second that ticks
I wait...
for that one moment where

brilliant light sweeps in
and I'm blinded by

your beauty

so we leave this place
going to a higher realm
making our way to
ecstasy

never looking back

Author notes

I have not finished editing the poem atm so feel free to help with any suggestions and tips.

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Gigglegasm
April 16
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Forgot the clappies
Gigglegasm
April 16

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Oooh! This is a great write. I love when yesterday's aromas linger, on sheets, on skin *sigh*
Pffft! And you said you weren't any good with sensual writes. You need a little more faith in yourself Hekate
AsianGal
April 15
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It's great!
This is very good.
phantomrider
April 15
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Nice
i like it
maralisa
April 15
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a nice write thank you for sharingmaralisa
Linaness
April 15

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I read this, and was like WOW.
It's somewhat awkward to read at first, but that is what makes it so enjoyable and flowing in itself.
That may sound a little odd, but it's somewhat true.
It creates such emotions coming through the poem.
A true joy to read.
But might I just add that possibly in the future you may want to consider the use of correct punctuation such as capital letters, commas and full stops.
It didn't quite effect me whilst reading, which is good, but after a second look, I noticed it immensely.
But again, good work in writing this.
- Kari
  April 15
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  Yep. Later I plan on editing it just to tired atm. Thanks for the great comment and suggestions. I appreciate it