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Epiphany As I Write

Have mercy on the exiled, Lord,
Forgive me for my sins.
How can I take such beatings Lord
Without my giving in?

I know the answer. True, my Lord;
You went through greater pain.
You suffered it for me, my Lord,
So that I could complain.

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2/3/09

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  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    June 29
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    so true
    human nature I suppose
    very creative
    God bless you my friend...

  • Vera Rich gold member
    May 30

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    Neatly done... and how splendid to see only ONE adjective in the course of eight lines! Personally, I prefer the intimate "Thou" forms when addressing the Lord - however, I can appreciate that here the "You" forms work very well.

  • Eusebius
    April 22
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    Short and most perfect!! What more can be said?


  • The Blue Lamp Post silver member
    April 15

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    The simplicity of this is almost controversial but truly well thought out. Powerful statements bring the simplest epiphanies at times.

    A very creative piece. Lovely rhyme and done quite well. Most enjoyable to come across this poem today. Thank you - and absolutely worth posting. ~The Blue Lamp Post


  • dame de la riviere
    April 15

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    J'aime ca! I like this...I like the narrator's perspective, the pattern of the rhyme, and the conclusion of the thought. Happy Easter season! , Dannie


  • Byepolar bare
    April 15

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    A very honest piece you've penned frodo. Granted, I don't believe in God, but you do which means everything in this piece. It has just the right touch of self depreciation. Good write.


  • Linaness
    April 15

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    This is so nice to read.
    A great little poem expressing love for the Lord.
    I also love how it rhymes so elegantly, which contributes to the overall flow of the poem, and is just set out so well.
    Nice work with this one =] Keep it up.


  • Amera gold member
    April 15

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    Absolutely wonderful! You have used a short poem to deliver a powerful and emotional statement of faith. It's fantastic to read such perfection penned as a prayer.

    Love,
    Amera♥

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