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this isn't a fairytale but I'm getting desperate.

&& you were always on the fringe of my every fantasy,

clad in blood & broken.dreams like a 21st Century Angel
and your street lamp halo was getting fainter by the second as I remembered your broken promises,
because love... if you wanted me to s w a l l o w your lies forever, you picked the wrong girl.

You could always wrap me in warmth with your smile before you peeled the scar tissue from my heart & killed me again. I was never afraid of being [vulnerable] but you made not being afraid into a thing of the past with

your

touch,

when my dreams and nightmares  e | n | t | w | i | n | e | d

&& when you t o u c h me it burns my skin because I told you athousandtimes that i.never.wanted.that

       seventeen, scarred, & a little bit scene with her tearstained

       cheeks, she was always a little bit too good at playing the

       victim. And you were always a little bit too good at making it

       allherdamnfault.

[Juliet never had this problem. Juliet would have forgotten her Romeo the first time he hurt her like you.do.me. but I’m a little more desperate & baby what can I say? i..need..you]



//I told you you couldn’t play me anymore…
but I never said that I could make myself leave//

 

♥ 

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  • [Juliet never had this problem. Juliet would have forgotten her Romeo the first time he hurt her like you.do.me. but I’m a little more desperate & baby what can I say? i..need..you]



    //I told you you couldn’t play me anymore…
    but I never said that I could make myself leave//

    I'd say its very contest worthy. Really, really contest worthy. In fact, it's so contest worthy that i'm just going to have to put it on the finalists list. Thanks for entering and good luck

    -B

  • "seventeen, scarred, & a little bit scene with her tearstained

           cheeks, she was always a little bit too good at playing the

           victim. And you were always a little bit too good at making it

           allherdamnfault."

     

    "//I told you you couldn’t play me anymore…
    but I never said that I could make myself leave//"

     ...................

    stunning

  • The title drew me in from a tidal wave of dirty pretty poetry and I am glad it did. This is creatively done and the message is one that, I'm sure (unfortunately) most of us have lived at some point.

    Good luck in the contest - I'd say this is definitely worthy!

  • this is amazing u are a great writer

  • I love it

    the first line caught me and the last line i almost cried
    I love it

  • Well;;
    first of all,I automatically fell in love with that first line
    "&& you were always on the fringe of my every fantasy,"


    This piece has great imagery,&& you used the words to
    great depth.
    I loved it hun.

  • I love it

    i jsut love this poem it shows emotion and strong love for someone its like you love someone but they dont love you back....great job

  • I love all your titles!!!

    clad in blood
    -Woah. You said 'clad' and made it cool. O.o

    she was always a little bit too good at playing the
    victim. And you were always a little bit too good at making it
    allherdamnfault.
    -Great lines.

    I really like the allusion to Juilet too. It puts a nice twist and cutting personality to the poem

    Definately contest worthy.

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