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Desinence

I walk to become lost.
      In the valley,
      In the valley,
      Below a dream.
Entering a realm of shadows
I walk to find the lost.
      In the valley,
      Below the valley,
      In the dream.
In the memory
I walk to be the lost.
      In the valley,
      Out of sight,
      Under hope.
Wandering past the woods
I enter to the lost.
      I am the lost.
      Out of sight.
      In the valley.
          Lost.

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I like the way I did this. I think it's neat.

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  • Ethereal One gold member
    April 20

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    Your opening line really grabs the reader.
    I like the format you have used in your poem. The repetition, and subtle changes are very effective.

    Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck.

    Jeannette