The Hermit

My soul is a shadow,
dark, cold, and hollow.
Only pain dares dwell,

so I shall bid farewell.

Leave me alone in silence,

and look back not even once.

For where used to be light,

rainbows, now lost from sight.

Don't try and be my friend,

you'll end up hurting in the end.

My life as a hermit has started,

and my life has all but departed.

So leave me alone, and don't dare pray,

for this man dieing within his soul today.

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joyfuljossie
September 25

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When the Hermit card is drawn
Wow, such heartache. This write really touches me deep from within; for I think all have at some point endured these emotions...
I know I have-
and in all honesty...
it's a place where I never hope to return.
Ann45
July 9
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Pain
Gosh such pain.
here for you always
June 13
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Great Poem. I admire your style. keep up the good writing.
illluck
April 15
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Great job , very imaginitive and deep.
Draig aine
April 15

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well penned my friend
\i have been ther and back again, your words will break any self imposed hibernation, for they reach out at the reader and invite them to explore your silent realm
Captain Blackthatch
April 15

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Fair dreams attend thee, poet! Ahoy! May I perish if a finer, more grand poem I ‘ave read this day. ‘Ere our ways divide, me course is run n’ I thank thee. A curse out of Egypt on any clod-like fool who dis’respecks this ‘n ye.
drapedindarkness
April 15

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Thoughtful Pain.
We have all felt the pain and despair but might struggle with the words, I only wish you well and hope to lift this curse, Thank You.
VaporousOne
April 15

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Depth
A well crafted emotional punch was packed here. I've been to those depths before and you put it down on the paper with authority. Nicely done.
getjiggy28
April 14

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A well written write, full of intelligent expression. I can relate to it, as I have social anxiety and am also a 'hermit'.

I enjoyed reading your poem.
Clovis...Curious
April 14

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Superb
A very fine write, indeed. I liked the way you chose to express yourself. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
VierSinneNur
April 14

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I love this particular rhyme scheme. And I think you wrote it well. This depicts a sad story, but one that is truthful. This is a Hermit life. Your work flows well, good job.
Pure Thought
April 14

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Well penned feelings, I too am a hermit, but have found a way of dealing with society. Just remember, everything is only temporary, even the good stuff.
Buddy