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Where is the love?

This world is so corupt
We try to make the world safe for our children
But, we can't even protect oursevles in our own home

Where is the love?
You look at a girl crying
Yet you walk away

Do you know why she cries?
No, you don't, cause you didn't take the time to learn
She could have been raped

She could have been beaten
She could have lost a loved one
But you don't care, so you keep walking

What happened to the value of humanity?
Where is the love?
What happened to fairness and equality?

It doesn't exsist anymore
Love...
Doesn't doesn't matter anymore

You die and no one cries
No one will ever know what you did with your life
Where's the love man?

Where did it go?
Are people hiding it?
So it wont ever show?

Where is the love?
Is what i ask
Is what i seek

And what i found has left me cold and weak
No one would care if you ever wrote a poem
No one would care if you never came home

Cause they don't know you
Is what they say
But so many die every day

And no one cares or even cries
But look at me
Look at my eyes

Every tear shed
Is one for every person dead
So, i ask you, one more time
Where is the love?

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  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    May 29

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    "
    What happened to the value of humanity?
    Where is the love?
    What happened to fairness and equality?

    It doesn't exsist anymore
    Love...
    Doesn't doesn't matter anymore

    You die and no one cries
    No one will ever know what you did with your life
    Where's the love man?

    Where did it go?
    Are people hiding it?
    So it wont ever show?

    Where is the love?
    Is what i ask
    Is what i seek"


    This was wonderful. It was very well done. And the the thought gone into this is really deep. You did an excellent job on this. Thank you for sharing.


  • Misunderstood
    April 30

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    lovely poem but i'm sorry i have to remove your poem from the contest cause i no longer allow prewrites in the contest sorry truly but please re-enter


  • Night Terrors
    April 29

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    Such despair it was heart breaking!!!
    The Positives:
    Great emotion went into this it really was so sad I loved it


    Room For Improvement:

    I is a proper noun it needs to be capitalized no matter what. Think of it as a substitution for your name.



    My Favorite Part:
    Where did it go?
    Are people hiding it?
    So it wont ever show?

    Where is the love?
    Is what i ask
    Is what i seek

    And what i found has left me cold and weak
    No one would care if you ever wrote a poem
    No one would care if you never came home

    This was so good I loved it!!!
    Overall:

    I give this an 7/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    April 16

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    Awesome

    Such a good take on the song
    And it speaks in Volumes & truth
    it holds some despair and is very emotional.
    It touched my heart and i enjoyed reading this piece.Thank you for sharing this wonderful write .
    Good luck in contest, Thanks for entering!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 16

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    I really enjoyed reading this one.
    It holds so much truth and really makes you
    think about your life and all of the things that
    we take for granted everyday. You bring up a
    lot of great points in this. I hope that you do
    well with it in this contest and good luck to you!
    Thanks a lot for sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • xXCaffeineAddictXx
    April 16

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    I get what you mean, sometimes the world can seem so cold and lifeless and like nothing you do will ever matter because nobody cares. corrupt has two r's and ourselves got a little scrambled. Great write! I think you're an amazing poet witha lot of insight.


  • debilynn gold member
    April 14

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    a very strong emotional write, this speaks volumes. i don't believe love is dead though. i do believe many are indifferent to it. thank you for sharing this. keep writing`! God bless you always


  • trekkergirl
    April 14

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    once again a very emotional write you have written. Also, a piece full of questions that if only I could I would answer for you. I do not believe that love is dead. However, you are correct in that we have a lot of people out there that have learned to turn their heads away from people... if they are not like them then they should not be noticed. If they are the homeless... the poor... the sick... then they are ignored by so many people. Yet, on an occasion you will see someone stop... talk... and help. It only takes one. Perhaps me... perhaps you. Good write.

  • division
    April 14

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    Good job with expressing the emotion. I like your use of rhyming in some of the lines, and I thoroughly enjoy the subject of this poem. Very powerful. Nice job.


  • decode
    April 14

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    beatin = beaten
    everyday should be two words

    this was very good. so many people today are apathetic when the world is suffering. you've expressed this well. nice job.

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