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Echo en Concerto: Redux

 

 

 

 

 

 

Your words surge over my senses

and I drown in their meaning.

 

Thick black clouds writhe like bulldog's fury

and streak across the sky.

Only a single solid bark

escapes before I am

 

               overtaken.

 

Only evil haunts as dark

as I am tormented with visions of you

 

and days pass under a sea of crows

beating their wings in concert, hovering

like an alfred hitchcock movie.

 

Then the echoes

of my name and the palm of your hand

 

               destroy me

 

back to reality.

 

 

It had not been days, nor more than a minute -

and I can't fight the tears I'd held for years.

 

 

 

No, you are not dead...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • darell
    April 25

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    Foreboding

    A haunting Concerto with an ominous
    tone which cast shadows of dark reflection.
    The images are riveting! drawing the reader
    into your world of nightmares.

  • Your words surge over my senses
    and I drown in their meaning.

    and this is what poetry should be about. very well done. congratulations on the silver and i am so looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • sweet arrival gold member
    April 14

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    you had to put a reference to that movie in there. that movie CREEPED ME OUT. i dont care how old it is. the imagery in this of feeling paralyzed is astounding, giving concrete examples for a feeling that is so far from concrete. you always have a depth in writing that is beyond me, but in this i see a healing from that almost. as if something had died inside you, making you numb, until something destroys that, allowing tears to flow and heal.
    i liked this... it took me from the state of despair to hope within a few minutes.


    • Keyser Soze
      April 14

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      Hope was the way more subtle concept I wove in there, about the reconciliation with my father. But what's more is the last line as denial.

      • sweet arrival gold member
        April 14
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        now it's even more powerful when i read it. thanks for letting me in.


        • Keyser Soze
          April 15
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          Ha, you know I never do that... I just give you a taste and let you unravel the rest on your own
          Something new with every read - my favorite


  • Metaphorist
    April 14
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    Better

  • sweet arrival gold member
    April 14
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    i am laughing. you are a genius, seriously.
    be back though.

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