My lips won't say the same words again,
and my mastery to pacify you has faded.
I see your beautiful traces, every lines I know,
I still love you but this feeling I couldn't perfectly show.
So with eyes closed, I am hoping,
for a day, we don't know each other.
Familiarity is the one that terribly breaks,
this supposed-to-be unbreakable bond that we have together.
Then, a halt, a perfect turn around of life,
once again, we will search for each other's light.
I'll bump into you that way I did before,
and you'll look at me in annoyance, and I'll be flattered at your sight.
I will get your phone number and call you every day and night,
with words of sweet nothings, showing my joy of knowing you at last.
And these ties that once broke apart,
started to reconcile and promised to make it last.
And so a vow was made with holding hands,
and we relive this love with a kiss.
We are once again, two heart with veins intertwine,
no cross roads, only a path for the both of us.
A promise has been made into this day forth,
few many words left unsaid before would be no more.
I'll pour out my heart and you'll be filled,
till it will explode into a romantic crimson.
Crazy as it may see but it's just the way it is,
we will fall into each other's hands again, pleased.
Author notes
20, A few words too many left unsaid, I wish that we were strangers, we could start again, start again all over.
Billie Myers: A Few Words Too Many.
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Comments
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I liked the idea behind this write, the way you put the quote into pictures...
I needed my sungalsses to read this write!! It's bright this early am!!
The rhyme scheme annoyed me...(maybe the wrong word??) It seemed that it was so loose that some lines rhymed and some didn't, and I was unable to tell whether or not it was supoposed to be that way.
It seemed tht some of the lines were tailored to make the couplet rhyme...
I see your beautiful traces, every lines I know,
I still love you but this feeling I couldn't perfectly show.
You could have said...I couldn't perfectly show this feeling. (or something)
This then would not have made me try to find the beat in every line...
That said, I liked some of the vocabulary you used, pacify..., traces..., reconcile...intertwined,
As a whole,I did enjoy this read! -
Clear thoughts and emotions
Seemed very honest, as if one was writing in a journal or confessing this face-to-face with someone
My one recommendation would be that you darken your background because it's really hard on the eyes.
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