You think that I don't know
about your secret addiction.
This sexual need that
demands my utmost attention.
You watch me every night,
knowing that I can't see you.
Hidden in the darkness,
your greedy eyes are all on me.
I just can't deny this urge,
teasing all your senses
and feeding your desires
that bring you to your knees.
I could close the blinds,
denying you of your dirty fetish
and leave you to imagination,
but I'm having too much fun.
No words are ever spoken
between my window and yours.
Tonight I'll use my body
as a willing sacrifice.
I give while you take,
all this is so exciting.
Always knowing, you can look
but you can never touch.
Your emotions surging,
but what you can't see
is what I do for you,
you do for me.
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this was the one you were worrying about submitting?
its actually tame to what my ideas were.
you have all those erotic writers on your page, and you host that erotica challenge, I would have thought this could melt my butter.
Im sorry to say it didnt, so not only am I feeling slighted that you've deliberately avoided my offerings in this genre, but am a little put out with your performance here.
Think I shall tell your mistress, dont think she's gonna be happy
...lol
damn, and I was so ready for the thrill too
sigh.
love,
jin
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Sorry, but I did not think you were looking for anything that was overly erotic. Which is why I chose this one which is tame. When I re-read the contest description I understood that you were looking for opinions and views as to being for or against voyeurism. Maybe that is my fault for mis-interperating your words...sorry. But thank you for an honest critique...
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No, I was playing with you,
I hope you dont take what I said to heart,
the poem itself is fine-
but ohhhh! when you told me you had something that might hurt me to read-
well come on, I didnt even feel you twisting my arms or nothing
to you in particular, (as well as one other) I said bring it.
so come on master.....bring it.
the contest is still open-you have another already written, I'll take it.
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Oh no..I am not offended at all. I welcome the tough and honest critiques. They are much better than the ones that are all buttered up simply saying "this is good, thank you for the entry...blah blah blah.." lol
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WOW, the title says it but my brain cells didn't grasp it LOL.. I read it a few times to make sure i was following and then suddenly SMACK.. that brick hit me off the side of the head and i realized how dumb I was,
very nicely written.
Love you much,
Mistress Rose
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