Lets go hide up high in the sky
And let our bodies dip and fly.
But do not venture too near
For you will loose all you fear.
The mighty Helios; god of the sun
Is out to pounce and have some fun.
Feathers of the rainbow glued with our love
He slowly picks apart with his golden glove.
Till the time was right I waited a year
To escape our imprisonment on the island here.
Fly to freedom we shall do
So I can be alone with you.
Author notes
A little bit of Greek Mythology for you 
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This is beautiful..
A really nice background to write a poem on too
Loved the line: "Feathers of the rainbow glued with our love"
And the last stanza.
Word perfect.
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lol thanks :$
felt like something different for a change hehe
check out my newest poem
(posting it now )
thanks
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aaaah!!! this is beautiful!!!!aaaaah u FINALLY wrote a new poem dude!! yayayayayayayayyayayayyayy
this is fantastic, i love the idea of it and the rhyme..
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lol um miki .. this is sorta old now but anyways yeh i did write something else ... my muse was and still is death tho and i dont really like this 1 very random and not very good but meh lol thanks anyway
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Okay, this was really good, but there were a couple things I picked up on.
Excuse me for saying this if it wasn't your intention, but your meter was quite out. As in, your couplets didn't really flow from one line to the next. If it wasn't your intention to keep perfect meter, then forget what I just said
Second thing, I'm not quite sure I understand this line:
But do not venture too near
For you will loose all you fear.
If you venture near, you will not be afraid? And I think you were looking for 'lose' as opposed to 'loose'.
Otherwise, a really good poem. I enjoy greek mythology
Well written,
Harriet.
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