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Twisted Purity

Losing our faith,
We are,
Forgotten our morals,
We have,

All sins,
Small and large,
Mixing with what once was pure,

Pure a word,
With simple definition,
Yet meaning so divine,

Evil with it's vines wrapping round,
Pulls us under,
Taking good with each tug below,

The flames enveloping our burdened hearts,
Pulling us further down,
Devouring virtue from all beings,

Goodbye innocence,
Goodbye happiness,
Goodbye hope for something more,
Something more out of this hell,
Something more which will never be,

Good riddance,
Let it burn,
Let us burn,

Innocence is no more,
Innocence is gone,

Faith met reality,
Faith met the truth,
Goodbye hope.

Author notes

I decided to type whatever came to mind. This is what came. I'm actually quite proud of this one. It has a rather difficult feel to it. I'd love to hear people's interpretations of this. (:

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  • Kathraina silver member
    May 23

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    Interesting piece, the emotion conveyed here is very distinct. We often times lose a sense of hope and just let go of any restraint from the good to do the bad.
    Good job. Bravo


    ♥ Kate


    • DreamtSong-x
      May 24
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      Thank you so much for taking your time to read and comment. I appreciate it! (:

      -- Tor


  • Heavens Child
    April 14
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    Well for something that just came to your mind this is really really good.
    What came to me as I read this was the struggle of good and evil. Evil desires winning over morality, til all the goodness within has been taken over, which in the end turns hope into despair. But I could be completely off the mark.
    Either way the imagery is excellent.

    • DreamtSong-x
      April 29
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      I am terribly sorry for never replying to this, I hadn't realized I had a comment. Your interpretation of this poem makes perfect sense, that's the explanation I didn't know how to give. Oh, and thank you so much for your compliment on the imagery!

      -- Tor


  • UptownGetAround
    April 13

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    Bombasshoe:D

    It's really good, but depressing.
    Your brother can go get attacked by the pirates and their pirate leader Mrs. Giammarco.
    (:
    You're a beast.

    • DreamtSong-x
      April 13
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      well, only if they're nice pirates. even though he "dislikes" my poem.. i still love him. plus, i guess that was the constructive critisism i needed, aha. thank you though buffallo for your comment, it's very muchly appreciated. (:

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