this man.
entering quickly without steps,
succinct.
he (He) follows
a pattern on the carpet
to surmise i fall short.of.mind.
but then
please, release
me; your coat.
(from the floor)
asks if He can be held
close.
i,
am not free from this account
just. yet.
does His eye graze that
floor?
i should like to be that pattern.
What did you think
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Wow... This is genius, poetic brilliance at its best. It's amazing what happens when we take the time to observe the seemingly-insignificant details
Anyway, nothing to critique here. Well done & keep up the great work!
Laura
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Wow. This is amazing. I honestly don't know what else to say.. Everything is beautiful, but those last three lines... Floored me, for lack of better words. You seem to have rid me of them. Excellent. Welcome to AP, I really hope to see more from you.
Marvelling,
~S.
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