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Ritual Salt

Where is the salt?
I neeed those brightsharp krystals
hot to my rugged smoooooth tongue
hot        to my wounds
Pure
salt distilled from
tears    from blood, sprinkled
by earthenware fingers
to sift through the skull
            to form grey drifts
of grit  amid the crenellations
    and the trelliswork
of non-
specific sections
  of my brain.
To burn my tongue to stain
the lungs    to sting the gut
to dry the blood
    and rot the bones.
I must atone          I am alive
and well                they're not.
I have been told it's not my fault
yet still I need the taste of salt.

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  • cullen33
    April 14
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    Good

    I understand...now.

  • cullen33
    April 14
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    Strange

    I didn't really understand it...AT ALL!