Your whispers of love caressed a gaping rift
In tones richly resonant across this divide
Laying promises like petals, you gave me a gift
One that my heart accepted with pride.
In tones richly resonant across the divide
Kisses like honey, entranced in your sphere
One that my heart accepted with pride
For the very first time, this heart felt no fear.
Kisses like honey, entranced in your sphere
Chiming in unison, never to fail
For the very first time, this heart felt no fear
Upon ocean's calm forever we'd sail.
Chiming in unison, never to fail
Never a thought these were words of deceit
Upon ocean's calm forever we'd sail
But sickly sweet words were from those of a cheat.
Never a thought these were words of deceit
Laying promises like petals, you gave me a gift
But sickly sweet words were from those of a cheat
Your whispers of love caressed a gaping rift.
Author notes
Word Prompt - -Mellifluous
1. sweetly or smoothly flowing; sweet-sounding: a mellifluous voice; mellifluous tones.
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/pantoum.html
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
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A contest entry
- Word Prompts! by TheSpiralGenerator.
550 points, ended April 15, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This seems like something I could have written about a certain someone, I do love this form very much I have discovered. Could I rhyme I might try it. Perfecto hun. Best to you in the contest
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Oooh! I've never seen a pantoum before, such a lovely form. It's a wonderful piece too, so sensual and I love your use of alliteration, not overdone, just perfect.
Good luck in the contest
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Good luck in the contst, anothr wondrful write, This was wonderfully written and it was a great pleasure to read your poem.
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This is excellent. This form poetry takes a lot of work and persistence with the repetition of lines and so on.
Good use of the prompt as well and the theme of the deceitful lover is always interesting to read about. Enjoyed your write.
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Excellent
Such a great use of form. So very skillful and masterfully done. Best of luck in the contest.
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ah the pantoum - a great form, i would remnove the author notes but that is just me
a well writtren poem that flows like a flowy thing in a flow that is flowing along a flow.
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