I never thought that just one look
Would throw me into a spiraling fall
It never even occured to me
That it could impact me in such a away.
your gaze looked right thru me
And it took a hold of my heart
i see it in my dreams at night
It is burned into my very thoughts
You have a hold of my heart
But you have no idea,
You have no idea
Of how that one look affected me
I know nothing will happen
This is all just a dream
But this is the real world
And that one look is all i have to hold on to .
Author notes
umm ok this is really dumb.. and it dont make much sense but oh well.
Written March 5th, 2004
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oy veh! who is this about?? Good capture of emotions!!
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oh this is gorgeous! it honestly makes perfect sense to me. the words that you chose add tons of depth and feeling to this poem. i am just blown away. great write, macey! --kylee
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loved the poem really great!
wow i love this poem, its really full of feeling and its personal and truthful. It comes from the heart, and thats what poetry is all about. "It is burned into my very thoughts" is a really great line. At first i thoguth it rhymed, but it doesn't. see thats how great your poetry is ! It fits together so well. thankyou aslo for commenting on my first poem on here.
natazzle21 -
No, it's not dumb at all! I can relate to your poem. It's awesome, personal, and honest. Reading this was a breath of fresh air. Good write!
Thanks for the kind words! I needed it.
Rock on, rock on, peace out,
~Erin~ -
oh my gosh!!!!! macey macey macey! this is so good..i started almost crying, lol. i was going through it saying all my favorite parts but every stanza has something that just really sticks out to me! you had so much description in your wording! that's awesome...it really helped display the feeling and emotion in this poem! awesome awesome job! i just love it so much. this has to be one of my favorite poems of yours yet! love ya tons!~
-brae
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