Thoughts Submerged.

toes of hand-me-down shoes tip-toe

closer & closer to water's edge.

she's wondering how it would be like to just keep walking

until thoughts are submerged & she is no longer breathing.

stopping existing if even only for a second,

her sweetest delight; the feeling of nothing.

she is flying off into infinity,

alive yet missing.

an empty vessle for others' pleasure.

slave to the bottle, lusting for white smoke.

she cries out across the open water.

somebody please save her.

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Prompt: picture
chia like i shall grow by Katelynplz @ deviantart.com

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Think of what you did and how i hope to god he was worth it [You know it will always be me]. by Candy Morphine. 900 points, ended May 3, 38 entries
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consternation imply
August 3

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A deep illustrious picture of what is troubling... It hurt to read it, but for some reason the end did feel like a release. Life is good no matter how bad it gets though. Once again no picture needed. So many pictures of things come to mind.
- EverxEnding
  August 6
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  lol I wrote it for a picture prompt contest
  but thank you!
Atrophya
April 27

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this reminded me of something personal.

=/

but i do get this. and it's amazing for the way you show two faces in this poem.
- EverxEnding
  April 27
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  It's only slightly personal.
  Thanks though! I'm glad you like it!
- - Atrophya
    April 27
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    an empty vessle for others' pleasure.
    
    slave to the bottle, lusting for white smoke.
    
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    this part is the personal part for you i believe.
  - - EverxEnding
      April 27
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      Nope, lol.
      
      "she's wondering how it would be like to just keep walking
      until thoughts are submerged & she is no longer breathing.
      
      stopping existing if even only for a second,
      her sweetest delight; the feeling of nothing."
      
      I have dark thoughts & demons.
    - - Atrophya
        April 27
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        omg! i was gonna put that first! xD
        
        damn it!
      - EverxEnding
        April 27
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        lol, you're so silly.
        
        Atrophya
        April 27
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        C is for Cookie, COOKIE COOKIE COOKIE!
        
        EverxEnding
        April 27
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        *poke!*
        
        Atrophya
        April 27
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        Cookie o.o
Candy Morphine
April 26

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her sweetest delight; the feeling of nothing.
-i like that.

alive yet missing.
-there's something very alluring about that line.

she cries out across the open water.
somebody please save her.
-i like the overt desperation there
- EverxEnding
  April 27
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  Thank you!!
Candy Morphine
April 17
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And that you will get.

Picture:
http://prettyfreakjesper.deviantart.com/art/springtime-118942497

.or.

http://katelynplz.deviantart.com/art/chia-like-i-shall-grow-118921976