Wings glide over furling sails,
The vessel drifts near.
My love, the sea, calls to me.
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Written March 5th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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It is an inspiring haiku, (an art that presently eludes me).I have a lot of reading to do to catch up on the entries. I hope to find another entry here from you. However that doesn't detract from the beauty of this- It is lovely.
~Von~ -
Oh... Oh... Oh... They're a fussy bunch them thar greeters I tell ya!
Well I liked it whether or not it met requirements, not that I have checked them out like... But anyways. Good piece
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WON derful , in spite of it not being part of the rules. You could alter this into a tanka, which means just adding a few lines . Lovely! Thank you for sharing. Welcome to AllPoetry, CookieZeal
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I agree a good write and well done, but please write another one maybe you have and I haven't got to it yet!
Lakota x -
your imagery is wonderful and if you haven't already re-submitted with a full length entry then i would strongly urge you to....hugs...leanne xxx
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Yes, quite good. Expand on it and it could be a super entry to the contest. Or you could write a different one, there's time
Thank you for entering Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry
Dee -
This is off to a good start. To make it fit the challenge requirements, you need to add more to this and make it 10 lines or more though, as Barbara pointed out. This is good so far.
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Though it is a nice poem (love that opening line), part of the contest criteria was that it be 10 lines minimum, and no haikus.
There is lots of time to add to this, change it, or enter a new one if you wish. When you change it, please let me know so I can come back to read
Edited on Mar 05, 3:20 p.m. because 'I can't type'.
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