A fragile house of cards we built,
Towering up to the heavens high,
Perfect in its simplicity,
A house of hearts not greedy spades,
Loving red in its facade.
A toss of a stone,
It tumbled down,
But cruel cruel irony,
One final pain to be dished out.
The stone was of my own making,
What pain did then I feel,
I made the tool of my own demise,
And watched the cards come tumbling down.
Now I'm faced with a unkempt pile,
Scattered over the table of existence,
A house of love flattened,
Foundation shattered.
Its time to pick up.
Should I attempt to rebuild,
I desire so desperately,
My house of cards again,
But would it only be a mockery?
Should I leave the table completely,
Cards lying where they are,
Scattered and ruined forever more?
No.
I choose the third option,
Start again,
But not aiming for my pristine palace,
That is for my memories,
No longer for reality.
I shall build a sturdier fort,
Made of all the cards,
Stronger and more flexible,
Able to withstand any blow.
Of hearts there will be plenty,
Those cannot be replaced,
But clubs for strength,
And diamonds for endurance,
Spades may sneak in,
But their greed shall not overpower.
My vision is large,
A fort of friendship,
Over a tower of love,
But it is necessary.
I cannot live without this house,
But its nature must change,
To suit the time.
Author notes
By snolan
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Comments
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This was very nicely written. I liked the flow to it. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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very well written. i liked this a lot, and you really portrayed a lot in this piece. i must say that i really did like it. (: thank you for entering & good luck ! ♥
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a nice write so full of depth and meaning throughout good luck in the contest
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