My salty tears tickle the cheeks,
The soul grows sick with longing.
The only way for the release –
Yield to the forbidden flame.
Oh, burning misery-desire…
How can I satisfy by torture?
How can I overcome the pain?
The answer is simple – just give up.
I yearn to get rid of a temptation -
Long of your strong hands embrace,
Thirst of your kissing moisture lips:
Forbidden desire burns with no release.
Oh, my pleasure, come to my abode -
Satisfy the hanger of hopeless obsession!
Author notes
Shiratikva
I was inspired by lyrics
WHAT IF YOU
by Josh Radin
and
this quote:
Often the best way to overcome desire is to satisfy it.
W. Somerset Maugham (1874 - 1965), The Razor's Edge, 1943
A contest entry
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this is intense, confusing in some parts but i think i understand. thanks for entering.
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ooh liked it
I'm loving the idea of satisfying temptation. definately worth a read twice or more thank-you for entering good luck
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JUDGED!
A wonderful take on the prompt, well done.
All the best to you in the contest and thanks for entering.
Ken -
this is very good, a lot of expression of some deeper feelings; when these ideas seem to occupy every thought; very well done... in small open words...PK
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this is great! and welldone!
this has so much passion in it, it was a really great read, sorry i havent read any of your work of late, im catching up now!!
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I love the feel of this...Sadness, desperation.
Nicely written to the prompt. Thanks so much for entering.
Good Luck!
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ohhhh dark, very dark. can imagine the black smothering your mind as i read this. love it x
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The frustration held barely in check, the final resolve to take action upon the temptation.
A very fine write, the progression and decision making within the mind of the narrator are clear and concise.
well done,
Peace
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i like your repitition. of sounds and of thebegining words...
that makes your peom so strong
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Brilliant write, well done on the quote prompt. Blessings.
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Good luck in the contest this is a wonderfully awsome writ I liked it a lot. It was very much a pleasure to read.
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