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You are

You are the malleable flesh beneath,
Squirming in mock desperation.
I stare direct with clenched teeth,
Surrender invigorates the moment’s domination.

A tie used at the neck of your hands,
Wrists together robbing you of movement.
Eyes stare peeling your modesty away band by band,
A woman controlled is a delight so opulent.

Stuck hard to force out a cry,
Something inner primal and male rejoices.
Eyes on mine no question of why,
Dance continues thrusting in single choice.

A hand on your throat to keep the breath penned,
Last act of dominance before the end.

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  • lexdalton
    April 12
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    Yup i see that now, thanks for the feed back


  • XcPrincessB
    April 12

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    I found the second line of the second verse a little hard to read. I thought maybe putting "the coupling" in brackets might help. But hey - I don't really know much about punctuation. Besides tht I really enjoyed your piece.