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[napkin folded] Easter haiku

napkin folded,
only trace of death's brief reign
on Holy face



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John 20:7

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  • Peteskid gold member
    July 11
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    wonderful capture, a s=cene very well understood and symbolic...PK


  • azure85 gold member
    April 12

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    napkin folded,
    only trace of death's brief reign
    on Holy face

    Very beautiful haiku for Easter, with the scene set in the empty tomb. A scene of wonder, and the reason for Easter. Thank you so much!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 12

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    Diane, I honestly feel that if a haiku is going to sound awkward without articles (the, a, and so on) then we should use them.

    I like this - I like the neat placement of the break at the end of line one. It's almost like a dedication to St Veronica.