From the top of great outcrops
I have gazed across the lands
Seen human-folk and fairy-folk
Traverse moon-silver sands
Within my darkened mirror
The echoes of future times
Portray palaces of crystal
As nations fall and climb
The wind whispered of eons
When Earth was fresh and new
A true enchanted Eden--
Marvels man could not construe
With pixies of the Winter-land
I danced circles round the sun
Perceived the skilful goblin
As gold cloth from hay he spun
The flora and the fauna
Parade their beauty in the spring
Jasmine’s gentle perfume
Golden eagle’s stretching wings
As summer warms the soil
Slender elves do underlie
Rainbow’s ends and stardust
Scattered across the sky
I once glimpsed a unicorn
Through a chilly midnight hush
Felt dragon’s breath upon my cheeks
During autumn’s fiery blush
Under a scarlet mountain
I dwelt with spirits of the trees
And dived beneath the oceans
Where dolphins spoke to me
They spoke of worldly magic
Within every living thing
In rolling weathered hillsides
And songs the spirits sing
From the soaring azure heavens
To the jewel-packed depths of earth
This mystical land special
Since the moment of its birth.
Author notes
For contest
Prompt:
#1 "I have seen the serpents dance, and if it isn't magic, I can find no better word." ~Amelia Atwater-Rhodes, Hawksong
It got longer than I originally intended!
A contest entry
- Contest #2 (Quote Prompts) by VelvetWings.
1050 points, ended May 4, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hello, thanks for taking the time to enter the contest. Unfortunately I must disqualify this and remove it from the contest as it is longer than the twenty (20) line limit. If you have another poem that is twenty (20) lines or less that has received a bronze trophy, please do enter it. Thanks so much.
Leance
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I enjoyed reading this, and despite it being long and rhyming, it was fabulous! Well, it's long because it tells a story, and I like the story it tells.
And rhyming isn't a bad thing so long as people do it right, and you did it right! I think a poem like this should rhyme, because it's fairytale-ish, and those are less suited to freeverse.
I'm glad you chose this quote because the other two entries were for the other quote. And I think the other one is easier to write for. But this is the kind of thing I was looking for for the fantasy-type quote.
Aside from the fantasy theme, it can be read with a bit of realistic outlook too; although the words are clearly describing mystical things, reading between the lines I feel that people each have their own experiences in the world and any experience, to the right person, can be a 'magical moment.'
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
~Sparrow
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Yay, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! As I wrote in the author's notes, it ended up longer than I intended (and I probably could have rambled on for longer, haha). Also glad you think I did the rhyming right XD Thanks for the kind comment
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