Close your eyes,
Relax your mind,
Remember what it’s like to breathe.
A distinctive touch
Can expose your innermost secrets.
A single, private thought
Of an amateur mind
Diluted in a frame of courage
And a sea of emotion
And one small soul.
One tiresome, lonely soul
Is lost forever
In a moments peace.
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this had the ability to soothe me, as strange as that may seem. it must be something about taking the time to close my eyes and relax. i felt at ease from the start and by the finish (which didn't take long) i felt i could breathe without tension. very nicely done.
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Woah
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wow....................
that was amazing
the emotion in this was awesome and i wood pick out a fav part but...... the whole thing is jst rlly awesome -
Wow. that just spoke so much to me. I mean, I really really felt this. And one small soul.
One tiresome, lonely soul
Is lost forever
In a moments peace.
That just says so much, in so few lines... so few words... you were able to make me cry. your talent astounds me. i shall add you as a favorite =] -
nice!!
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this gives me a feeling of releif and a weight being lifted. A fantastic write I think. The last lines my faves, no suggestions for improvement, it's there
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i dont know what to say..
pure brilliance, really.
I love it when I find a great poet, and I think I have defintly just found one, I am going to have to read more.
This was jus great,Kevan.
Welldone,
amazing
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Wow. This was really good. Nice word choice and flow. Well Done.
-Chantale
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wow
i loved every word and the imagery was fantastic, really well written and it is beautiful. I really loved it and had to reread it.
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this is beautiful. i liked it alot
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I LIKED IT! there was alot of emotion and well.... i just thought it was nice
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Wow. I like much!
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This is beautiful.
<3
I have no other words.
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