Flowing dreams falling into the darkness
of oblivion
Stark creations of reality nipping at the
flourishing light
Winds of change are stronger than my
yesterdays
Seeking only the solace of night
Author notes
A contest entry
- April Light by Salty Hibiscus.
450 points, ended April 16, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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excellent imagery
You have created a very haunting mood with your words here.
I really like:
"Flowing dreams falling into the darkness
of oblivion"
Jeannette
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A ghostly apparition of poetic device, a twist of the fatal and frightfull night, let the gentle evening breeze carry me away for I am as light as a feather and less than bound to this thing I used to call life.
I like it, I like it so!
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I always enjoy reading your work. The first line here is most stunning. I like it. May you do well in the contest.
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amazing take. thanks for your entry.
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LOVELY!!!!!
And such are our dreams to us, changing us and forming what shall be the coming day.'s
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oh wow..
what an amazing little piece you've penned! the contrast between light and dark whuile it has been done a number of times , has in my opinion.. not been written with such powerful iagery in so few words, it proves not only the great poectic talent you possess, but also the wisdom you've gained in life..an excellent pen my sweet lady!
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Beautiful write. Wonderful imagery. I liked the parts of light and night the best. It makes me think of how the days get longer during the late spring and summer and it's nicer to get outside then. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Haley Mary
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Oh well done, my friend
A fine sharing in this contest
Wishing you much light and love,
Sandy
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