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haiku revisted (draft 10)

 

 

 

 

 

window reflects
the sky and white collars~
lunch carriers

 

 

 

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  • Swangrnv gold member
    April 12
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    you prove

    over and over, you are one very talented woman..nice job my friend..


  • maralisa silver member
    April 11
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    I like this haiku thank you for sharingmaralisa


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 11
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    Nice haiku...so expressive in this. I liked it!