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Stupid, Selfish Girl

Run, run, run
Run from your mistake
Run from the pain you caused others

It's all your fault you know
That he's dead
You couldn't stop him

He's dead because of you
How could you think he would love you?!
You only pushed him closer to the edge

You made his choice for him
You pushed him to die
IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT!!!

You had to tell him you loved him
That when ever you talk to him your heart is beating fast
That you cry every time he says that he deserves to die

You stupid, selfish girl!!
You knew he loved another
Yet you wanted him to know how you felt

Thinking just maybe it would be enough
You were sadly mistaken
You just made his choice for him

YOUR THE ONE WHO DESERVES TO DIE!!!!
Because your a stuipid, selfish girl
And for that you deserve to die

No one would have cried for you
No one cared for you
You Selfish girl

And you made his choice for him
Because your a stupid, selfish girl
Who loved the wrong guy

Stupid, selfish girl!!!!

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  • bridgetjanejone
    May 5

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    Too much punctuation !!! and capital letters and, sadly, not original enough. Though I understand it says it all for you.


  • Reaper-117
    May 3

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    Intense and perfect for what I asked. Yet I must say this is strikingly beautiful and close to my heart....my fiance actually did come and tell me how she felt....I was suicidal and planning on night seeing the end of the year...she was my best friend....she kept me alive. Yet here that love has been turned into horror...nicely done and thanks for entering.


  • ilovE him
    April 27

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    this is really powerful and filled with emotion. its a wonderful poem! great job! my favorite part was:

    You had to tell him you loved him
    That when ever you talk to him your heart is beating fast
    That you cry every time he says that he deserves to die


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    April 22
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    Tons of emotion in this; thanks for entering

  • sunsunny3235
    April 20
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    I'm sorry but this sort of an adult topic, I love it though


  • AshesFromFire
    April 15

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    Wow! Well, if you were trying to get mt attention, you did! Definitly touched my heart (maybe because I've been in a similar situation) The flow could use a little work, but I'm all for authors choice....good luck in my contest....I really like this one


  • HereComesTheSun
    April 14

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    i noticed that there are comments on this piece which is going to cause me to have to DQ due to the contest's rules

  • HereComesTheSun
    April 14
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    i can tell the hurt in this poem. its just loud and clear i mean you do an amazing job expressing that, what i want to see is you to try and think of the beauty done from this mistake and write it with metaphors and similes and i would love for you to just let it be bittersweet instead of bitter.

    thanks for entering


  • trekkergirl
    April 14

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    okay so much pain in this one... It is human to take this view that you have taken. To believe that you are at fault for a decision that another had made. But not so. Your friend. Dear one is at fault. And even he was in so much pain that I cannot fault him for wanting the pain to stop. He just did not know how to make it stop any other way. No one is at fault. The signs were probably there. But no one knew what to look for. No dear one you were never at fault. Life can be cruel... painful.... but blaming ones self for what another chooses is wrong.

    You dear are alive. He is dead. It was his choice to end his suffering as he did. Instead of coming to you... another friend. A family member. A teacher... a preacher.

    Do not blame yourself. Know that whatever choice he made... I am sure it was not to hurt you or any other loved one.

    He was not so mean. He was only a person in pain.



    You are an excellent writer dear. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!


  • XxAcidicDreamzxX
    April 11

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    So sad, once again its not your fault! You are an amazing poet keep writing!! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!!


  • Blasphemous Girl
    April 11

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    Amazing. I once write a poem called.."Me and you,"
    I think you'd like it. It was about a friend, I was in love with him. He loved someone else, he was in love with my best friend. You should check it out.
    He tried to kill himself because he was so in love with her, but didn't want to hurt me. I love this poem. I can relate. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • Ami
    April 11

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    No!!

    If he is dead it's not because of you you were his best friend! and you don't deserve to die!

    As for the poem it was a great write but don't blame yourself

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