in the blink of an eye
doorways slammed shut
to all thoughts of a future.
I’ve dreamt for weeks
about our first kiss
to finally realize
that nothing will ever
change.
I’ll remain hopeless
on this island
of failure forever.
Author notes
prompt: fantasy island
40 words.
my 'fantasy island' makes me depressed.
21/150
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A contest entry
- My first sorta quickie by geckogirl.
700 points, ended April 11, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I never imagined Fantasy Island being a sad place.. you thought outside the box... strong piece.. well done and thanks for entering... good luck... *rose
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thanks for the bronze
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First stanza = destroying.
second stanza = softly heartbreaking.
third stanza = not quite as amazing as the first two -
aw =/
tragically beautiful.
i love the first stanza, i really can relate to it.
a lovely mix of emotion and imagery here,
an excellent write.
ElectricBloom
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aww. :] not happy, but detachedly amusing that you can make 'fantasy island' sad. *hugs* sorry, i'm spastic. XD
'in the blink of an eye
doorways slammed shut
to all thoughts of a future.'
i really like that, but the ending is killer too.
amazing write, hun. best of luck in the contest. :]
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how beautiful.
♥
i adore the title.
i can`t pick out a favourite, i love all of it.
emma is amazing.
♥
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haha i love how you can make the happiest prompts seem depressing.
well actually i don't love it
but i love you.
i like the second stanza -
How can fantasy island depress you?
Oh wait - cos fantasies are never as good as realities...
I get that actually haha
Love your opening btw;
"in the blink of an eye
doorways slammed shut
to all thoughts of a future." -
Prompt: Fantasy Island... good luck
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